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by RSchibler
Fri Jun 14, 2019 4:28 pm
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

If it's another 50% cut I'm gonna cry. I will give it my best shot, but I'll cry the whole time. Ugly cry. If that's what you want to do to me, Wulf, well, that's on you. ;)
by RSchibler
Fri Jun 14, 2019 12:30 pm
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

Chuck, I like it! I like the determination and the dread, and the twist. Humans can be so myopic. I got "it" just before I read the reveal, which is perfect pacing. Surprising but inevitable. I still wonder if that block of exposition couldn't be smoothed out somehow. "When his people...
by RSchibler
Fri Jun 14, 2019 11:39 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

I'm reading 11.22.63 right now and am loving it. I love his characterizations and the way he grows setting without breaking the tension. He really is a master. The only other thing of his I've read is The Regulators and I did not like it. I think I'm learning almost as much from King's novel as I am...
by RSchibler
Wed Jun 12, 2019 3:56 pm
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

Hey AjZach, nice editing. I really like the bit about the lightning pointing to the spot in her dreams. Your prose is solid, no issues there (except for "touch" should be "touched" I think). I wonder, if you could give Julia a stronger internal conflict and arc, if the story migh...
by RSchibler
Tue Jun 11, 2019 4:32 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Contest Questions
Replies: 90
Views: 4225

Re: Contest Questions

Mother of Dragons is Liz - Becky is me! Pretty much what Brittany said - yes, this contest is for unpublished authors but it’s not for beginning writers. Your first short story ever probably won’t win, but because of the gradated honors and the astonishing prizes, not to mention no entry fee, it’s w...
by RSchibler
Mon Jun 10, 2019 8:03 am
Forum: Writing: Craft, Talent, Technique
Topic: Helpful Writing Links
Replies: 20
Views: 1518

Re: Helpful Writing Links

https://thetimelinesofslang.tumblr.com/ ... thors-note

Nifty sliding scale of slang appearances. Website can be a little slow, but it's awesomely useful!
by RSchibler
Sun Jun 09, 2019 8:16 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

You want the editor to read it without one complaint. Because he's got 1000 more to read, and his tired eyes are just waiting for a reason to pass and move on to an easier one. Also, Becky, you have one tiny error. In a 500, it stands out like the beacon on a lighthouse. Fix that. : ) I think I fix...
by RSchibler
Sun Jun 09, 2019 7:30 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

Peony, that's great. The focus on the goal, the struggle of wanting to live in a body again, really works. I really liked the concentration on dialogue. And for me this time, it was fun! (Whoops, new plan! wotf001) I got chills on your last line. Well done! wotf009
by RSchibler
Sun Jun 09, 2019 7:20 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

My word count says 498. Wulf, that was brutal and I only had to cut 100 words. But it was worthwhile. I first put it through the 10% solution, except for the last 3 steps. This got me from 600 to 540. Then I focused on my theme (dying of the light) and threw out everything that wasn't that. That got...
by RSchibler
Sat Jun 08, 2019 3:35 pm
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Discussion: Q2, Volume 36
Replies: 180
Views: 6845

Re: Discussion: Q2, Volume 36

I brought mimosas and macarons. I'm not twitching yet, not bad, but who doesn't like mimosas and macarons?! Fortune favor the slightly tipsy and overfed. wotf013
by RSchibler
Sat Jun 08, 2019 5:31 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

Last Words by Wulf Moon. Copyright 2019 I sat in a hard plastic hospital chair, fingers touching the book inside my jacket while I watched my father die. [BAM. In with the CSP. I always avoid doing this kind of opening because it doesn't feel very poetic or evocative, but really, seeing it done here...
by RSchibler
Sat Jun 08, 2019 4:36 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

Cousin Coyote Meets Mother Torment by M. Elizabeth Ticknor 999 words, copyright 2019 Coyote slipped into Sheriff Mallory’s skin as the man traversed the arroyo colloquially known as Devil’s Creek. [I love this sentence except for colloquially, which takes it from poetic to a mouthful, for me] Boots ...
by RSchibler
Sat Jun 08, 2019 4:15 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

I'm on it, will post comments on both stories in a few minutes.
by RSchibler
Fri Jun 07, 2019 4:31 pm
Forum: Story Critique Exchange
Topic: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges
Replies: 212
Views: 75911

Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

If I haven’t seen it I’ll read it. I’ve had a lot going on and am not certain who I’ve read for.
by RSchibler
Thu Jun 06, 2019 5:14 pm
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

Wulf Moon wrote:Could someone please fix Super Secret #6? It's grand vista. Thanks!


That’s my typo, sorry! What was that about a clean manuscript again?
by RSchibler
Thu Jun 06, 2019 2:13 pm
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

In case anyone is feeling a tad lost about which Super Secret is which, I have been keeping tabs: #0: Proper manuscript format for the win. #1: Enter EVERY quarter. With a fresh story. #2: DON'T drive to the story #3: Set the hook! #4: Pick a major emotion and make your reader FEEL it down to their...
by RSchibler
Thu Jun 06, 2019 9:47 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

Before I get to Sutherland's Flash piece, I recently posted another SUPER SECRET. It was on word count. Why, when I said not too much not too little, am I having everyone work on Flash? Flash will likely be too small to win this contest (not always, but either fringe of the spectrum gets very hazy)...
by RSchibler
Wed Jun 05, 2019 4:16 pm
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

Issues addressed. Thank you for taking the time to do this! I admit I had a very challenging day today in my personal life, and pounded this out this morning without a lot of reflection because I wanted to get it done before Friday. I'd done some research a few days ago, but the story and characters...
by RSchibler
Wed Jun 05, 2019 11:04 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

It's from a very famous poem by Dylan Thomas. We're all riffing on the same theme, but the real genius wrote the poem in 1947.
by RSchibler
Wed Jun 05, 2019 9:37 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

Wulf, if you go to the full editor and preview screen there’s bold underline and italics options at the top of the text entry box.
by RSchibler
Wed Jun 05, 2019 5:49 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

Dr. Mann Chiu Lee felt it several seconds before he understood what it was. "It", to me, is not a hook. Maybe more specific? The warp bubble had ceased its warbling hum. With his gut already in knots, he moved to the nearest port. The stars should be blurry streaks. Instead, they twinkled ...
by RSchibler
Wed Jun 05, 2019 5:40 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

Here is my very brief flash story. Chuck, I'll dig into your excerpt in a moment. Dying of the Light It was not a grand death. In fact, it was almost mundane. Movement slowed, lightness faded. Mass once vibrant seeped into thin wisps of vapor and finally into nothingness. "Well," said the ...
by RSchibler
Mon Jun 03, 2019 6:37 am
Forum: Story Critique Exchange
Topic: Critiques by Ishmael
Replies: 8
Views: 1096

Re: Critiques by Ishmael

Had a flash of panic that I'd never replied to you, but as far as I can see I did. If it was me, mea culpa! Folks, take him up on this offer! Blunt, yes, but very very helpful. Ishmael, I might send my Q3 to you if that's alright. I'm almost done with my grammar edit.
by RSchibler
Sat Jun 01, 2019 2:01 pm
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

wotf009 I will have this on your desk ASAP, sir.

Won't posting it here preclude the ability to submit it for publishing, though?
by RSchibler
Tue May 28, 2019 11:24 am
Forum: Story Critique Exchange
Topic: Qtr 3 Crit Swap
Replies: 2
Views: 48

Re: Qtr 3 Crit Swap

PM me, always up to critique.
by RSchibler
Sun May 26, 2019 8:16 pm
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Discussion: Q3 Volume 36
Replies: 167
Views: 4387

Re: Discussion: Q3 Volume 36

Excellent article. Thanks for sharing. We have to make the reader care *right now* about our story. More than they care about their kids fighting in the playroom or the beep of the microwave. Hooks, all the way down.
by RSchibler
Sun May 26, 2019 10:09 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36
Replies: 776
Views: 19351

Re: Moon's SUPER SECRET Bonus Challenge! Vol. 36

My very first short story submitted to WotF began with someone waking up. I didn't know it was so cliche at the time! Since then I've tried to do better, but I am now startled that the only story I've ever resubmitted to WotF had characters in the forest at the beginning of the first version. Intere...
by RSchibler
Sat May 18, 2019 4:31 am
Forum: Writing: Craft, Talent, Technique
Topic: Story mentally plotted, but can't get it out
Replies: 14
Views: 452

Re: Story mentally plotted, but can't get it out

Hey all, wanted to weigh back in here. I ended up doing what a few of you suggested and just pushing through the writing. I think the story ended up pretty solid. More relevantly, it certainly isn't any worse than my other stories. I am still uncertain why I got stuck - perhaps the genre felt uncomf...
by RSchibler
Sat May 18, 2019 4:27 am
Forum: The Contest - Quarterly Topics, and Other Items
Topic: Discussion: Q2, Volume 36
Replies: 180
Views: 6845

Re: Discussion: Q2, Volume 36

LittleRed wrote:Thanks guys for the warning but disgruntledpeony is right --- this is my SF - so no resubbing for me.



Op my bad. Congratulations wotf010

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