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by Don Coyote
Wed Dec 02, 2020 10:51 am
Forum: Writing: Craft, Talent, Technique
Topic: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets
Replies: 71
Views: 9268

Re: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets

Thanks, Reuben. Here it is again, with corrections- The rookie Warden stormed into the office, slamming the door. “I get it, Lieutenant. You're a mud-skinned Troll and hate me for being an Elf. Good! I hate you too. But the Commander put me on your squad and we have to work together.” The Lieutenant...
by Don Coyote
Sat Nov 28, 2020 12:54 pm
Forum: Writing: Craft, Talent, Technique
Topic: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets
Replies: 71
Views: 9268

Re: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets

The second half of the assignment. Turn the dialogue into a vignette with 250 words or less- The Warden stormed into the office, slamming the door. “I get it, Lieutenant. You're a mud-skinned Troll and hate me for being an Elf. Good! I hate you too. But the Commander put me on your squad and we have...
by Don Coyote
Sun Nov 22, 2020 10:43 pm
Forum: Writing: Craft, Talent, Technique
Topic: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets
Replies: 71
Views: 9268

Re: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets

If I may be permitted, here's the re-write of my dialogue. Critiques welcome. Eager, the characters aren't just upset with each other. They hate each other. There's a story why Trolls and Elves hate each other, but that's for another time. The rookie Warden stormed into the office, slamming the door...
by Don Coyote
Fri Nov 20, 2020 10:18 am
Forum: Writing: Craft, Talent, Technique
Topic: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets
Replies: 71
Views: 9268

Re: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets

Folks, whatever I post on this forum, feel free to critique. Because I'm getting too old to work on aircraft, I need to sharpen my writing skills (and quick ) and can't do that in a vacuum or an echo chamber. I can stab at the keyboard and make words appear on the screen, but beyond that, I don't kn...
by Don Coyote
Wed Nov 18, 2020 5:21 pm
Forum: Writing: Craft, Talent, Technique
Topic: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets
Replies: 71
Views: 9268

Re: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets

Reuben,
The last two lines confuse me as well. It was at the end of a long day and my brain was mush when I posted. I agree with you, they need to be reworked.

Wulf,
Thank you for taking time from your busy schedule to help.
by Don Coyote
Tue Nov 17, 2020 11:10 pm
Forum: Writing: Craft, Talent, Technique
Topic: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets
Replies: 71
Views: 9268

Re: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets

I'll give it another go, this time writing twelve lines rather than the twelve sentences I wrote before- an important distinction. I'll get to the second part of the assignment later. For now, it's time to sleep. Got work tomorrow. --------------------------------------------------------------------...
by Don Coyote
Tue Nov 17, 2020 6:16 pm
Forum: Writing: Craft, Talent, Technique
Topic: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets
Replies: 71
Views: 9268

Re: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets

Thank you, Eager. Thank you Wulf. I followed the links to read the exercises in the Super Secrets thread. I really like the Lincoln Lawyer (and Bosch series by Michael Connelly and am running through The Fifth Witness (on Audible) to listen to the dialogue. This is an area I definitely need improvem...
by Don Coyote
Sat Nov 14, 2020 9:01 pm
Forum: Writing: Craft, Talent, Technique
Topic: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets
Replies: 71
Views: 9268

Re: Experimenting with Exercises from Wulf's Super Secrets

Interesting exercise. Good and useful critiques in this thread. I'll give it a go. A bit of dialogue from a short story I'm working on- “I lost my beautiful egg,” Thom moaned, brushing at the yoke running down his birthday coat. “Who are you and why, of all things, did you crack an egg over my head?...

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