First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby WriteToLive » Tue Nov 22, 2011 6:45 pm

I'm more than willing to participate since my thesis is kind of winding down.
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby morshana » Tue Nov 22, 2011 10:46 pm

I'm interested...after Thanksgiving. Is that too late? Or is this good through all of December?
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Jess » Wed Nov 23, 2011 1:30 pm

morshana wrote:I'm interested...after Thanksgiving. Is that too late? Or is this good through all of December?

That's not too late. I'd say "most" of December, since people are going to want to have a little time to consider comments before the deadline. Last quarter, this idea popped up pretty close to the deadline (a couple weeks, if I recall correctly, and no, I'm not going to go look at the OP to find out), and I don't recall anyone complaining about time constraints. Of course, this quarter has all the holiday chaos.
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby morshana » Fri Dec 09, 2011 4:20 pm

Jess wrote:
morshana wrote:I'm interested...after Thanksgiving. Is that too late? Or is this good through all of December?

That's not too late. I'd say "most" of December, since people are going to want to have a little time to consider comments before the deadline. Last quarter, this idea popped up pretty close to the deadline (a couple weeks, if I recall correctly, and no, I'm not going to go look at the OP to find out), and I don't recall anyone complaining about time constraints. Of course, this quarter has all the holiday chaos.


I am too late to join this exchange?
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Rebecca Birch » Fri Jan 27, 2012 3:40 pm

Anyone interested in a first 450 exchange for Q2?

I've got my story mostly done, but I'm struggling with the opening, and I'd love to get some feedback on it.
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Postby Dustin Adams » Fri Jan 27, 2012 7:22 pm

You may send to me.
I think you have my email already.
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Postby gethinmorgan » Sat Jan 28, 2012 1:39 pm

Me too, please! I gotta whole story sitting here, but the begining limps like a two legged elephant! PM or email! :D
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Dustin Adams » Sat Jan 28, 2012 1:53 pm

A two legged elephant doesn't limp. It drags.

What do you call a fly with no wings?

A walk.

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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby kyle » Sat Jan 28, 2012 2:53 pm

Dustin Adams wrote:A two legged elephant doesn't limp. It drags.

Depends on which legs it's missing. I can also imagine an alternating hop-hop movement...

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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby s_c_baker » Sat Jan 28, 2012 10:47 pm

kyle wrote:
Dustin Adams wrote:A two legged elephant doesn't limp. It drags.

Depends on which legs it's missing. I can also imagine an alternating hop-hop movement...

It might also just fall over. (Elephants being pretty dang heavy--so heavy, in fact,they essentially evolved an extra toe at the back of their feet.)
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Jess » Sun Jan 29, 2012 9:03 pm

I guess I'll throw my hat in the ring again for my Q2 front-runner. The thing's just gathering dust (or the digital equivalent thereof) while I wait on my RL readers' feedback, so I may as well toss it out to a couple of people I don't know, right?

Anyway, give me a holler if you want to swap 450. Thanks in advance.
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Postby Dustin Adams » Wed Feb 08, 2012 6:46 am

I've updated, changed, and transmogrified my 450.

Looking for volunteers/exchangers, previous and or new.
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Kary English » Wed Feb 08, 2012 7:45 am

I'll be happy to have another look. :)
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Patrick S. McGinnity » Sun Feb 12, 2012 2:08 pm

Hello all,

As we approach the deadline for Q2, I wanted to see if there is still anyone looking to exchange a first 450 with me. If so, let me know.
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Strycher » Mon Feb 13, 2012 5:29 am

Patrick S. McGinnity wrote:As we approach the deadline for Q2


We're not approaching the deadline yet! We're not even half way through the quarter! Don't scare me like that!

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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby hlf » Mon Feb 13, 2012 11:38 am

I'm available for exchanges if anyone wants to trade.
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Patrick S. McGinnity » Mon Feb 13, 2012 12:56 pm

Strycher wrote: We're not approaching the deadline yet! We're not even half way through the quarter! Don't scare me like that!


Sorry, I didn't intend to, I just needed a slick way to start the sentence, sort of a lead in. Also I work slowly enough that if I'm not in final edits a month and a half out, I might not make it, so it always feels to me like time is short.
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Strycher » Tue Feb 14, 2012 8:33 am

Patrick S. McGinnity wrote:Also I work slowly enough that if I'm not in final edits a month and a half out, I might not make it, so it always feels to me like time is short.


Me too. ::meep::

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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby DavidK » Fri Feb 24, 2012 4:02 pm

Q2 story finished and read and re-edited after several 1st reader reviews, BUT my #1 fan doesn't like it :(

I'm hoping that it's because she's not into the science fiction genre and the story, at 9K, was possibly too long (for her).

I would be thrilled to get 3 first 450 word exchanges so that I can form a consensus.

PM or email me your details - send 450ish of your work at the same time if you email if you'd like.

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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby s_c_baker » Fri Mar 09, 2012 8:11 pm

I have about half of my Q2 entry done now, and am ready to start sending out my first 450. If I've already done yours, I'll be in touch. wotf001

(If not, feel free to drop me a line! I'm kind of concerned about this one even making sense, let alone being any good.)
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby MJNL » Wed Mar 14, 2012 2:47 pm

Woo, go late-in-the-game crits! Totally open to swapping 450s for Q2 if someone's still up for it.
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby morshana » Wed Mar 14, 2012 4:06 pm

I am! =)
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Strycher » Thu Mar 15, 2012 3:54 pm

Yeeeah . . . I've gotten some mixed feedback on my opening. If anyone is still swapping 450s, I'd be obliged. PM me?

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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Patrick S. McGinnity » Sat Mar 17, 2012 6:36 am

s_c_baker wrote:I have about half of my Q2 entry done now, and am ready to start sending out my first 450. If I've already done yours, I'll be in touch. wotf001

(If not, feel free to drop me a line! I'm kind of concerned about this one even making sense, let alone being any good.)


Stewart, I'll be getting back to you tonight on your 450.

I've already subbed for Q2, but I'd be glad to look at 450s for folks, just PM me.

Good luck!
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Rebecca Birch » Wed Mar 21, 2012 4:34 pm

Tossing my hat in the ring for last minute First 450 exchanging!

If anybody's got a few moments and a first 450 they'd also like looked at, toss me a PM or an email.

Thanks!
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Solanavi77 » Tue Mar 27, 2012 5:53 pm

I'll toss my hat in the ring too. send me a PM.
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Alex Kane » Tue Mar 27, 2012 9:07 pm

I owe a couple of you crits. You know who you are. I may be a day or two late (that is, tomorrow or the next day). I'm so, so sorry... A 20-page paper deadline looming, several other smaller papers, exams, and a documentary/group presentation project have me losing my mind and walking in circles.

Hope you understand. I'm in no place to give a thoughtful critique right now, but I'll try and get you one as soon as possible. Again, so sorry.

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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Patrick S. McGinnity » Wed Mar 28, 2012 7:07 am

Alex Kane wrote:I owe a couple of you crits. You know who you are. I may be a day or two late (that is, tomorrow or the next day). I'm so, so sorry... A 20-page paper deadline looming, several other smaller papers, exams, and a documentary/group presentation project have me losing my mind and walking in circles.

Hope you understand. I'm in no place to give a thoughtful critique right now, but I'll try and get you one as soon as possible. Again, so sorry.

wotf005


Alex, I still owe you one, too, which should be forthcoming tonight.
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby Dustin Adams » Thu Apr 26, 2012 10:25 am

I'm up for another round if anyone has a 450 ready for exchange.

I'm trying something new this time. Need to know if I'm on the right track...
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Re: First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges

Postby morshana » Thu Apr 26, 2012 12:36 pm

I'm up for a 450 word exchange. I might have another contender later in the quarter (when I get it written), but I'm wondering how this story works. =)
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