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Story Critique

Postby Strycher » Wed May 16, 2012 10:25 am

I've got a less than 3K first draft I'd like to critique swap. This story is something different for me, and I'm not sure it works at all. I need someone who doesn't mind being honest (I've got a thick pelt, so no worries).

I'll crit anything up to contest length. (Be aware that due to some real life drama this week, I may not be able to get a critique for a longer-than-flash story back to you until after the weekend.)

Last note: I'm throwing this one into the Hatrack trigger challenge. If you're participating in this quarter's trigger challenge, you can't crit this story as it would damage my anonymity.

PM me, please.

Thanks!
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Re: Flashish

Postby Dustin Adams » Wed May 16, 2012 12:08 pm

Bwa ha ha, I know how many words yours is.

Don't say anything else tho as I'm totally in that contest. wotf011

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Postby Strycher » Wed May 16, 2012 12:14 pm

Dustin Adams wrote:Bwa ha ha, I know how many words yours is.

Don't say anything else tho as I'm totally in that contest. wotf011

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Re: Story Critique

Postby Rebecca Birch » Wed May 16, 2012 12:27 pm

I have to admit, although I've heard the term Hatrack many times, I'd never really looked into it. Have done so now and have registered. If I can write fast enough, I may get something in for this as well. (Sorry, that means I can't crit this!)
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Re: Story Critique

Postby Dustin Adams » Wed May 16, 2012 12:40 pm

What's funny is for last year's contest I came in... 4th place.

I'm sending that story to On The Premesis for their #17 - humor

I doubt I'll come in 4th over there tho. wotf016

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Re: Story Critique

Postby morshana » Wed May 16, 2012 1:11 pm

I'm interested in a swap, Krystal. Hope to have my story done after the weekend.
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Re: Story Critique

Postby Strycher » Wed May 16, 2012 4:04 pm

morshana wrote:I'm interested in a swap, Krystal. Hope to have my story done after the weekend.


Okee, e-mail me whenever you're ready. wotf007

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Re: Story Critique

Postby Strycher » Thu May 17, 2012 12:34 pm

Really? Only three people have stories they'd like critiqued?

Again, I'm offering to critique a story of up to 17,000 words in exchange for a critique of a story that's less than 3,000 words. I get good feedback from people--typically my critiques are helpful.

I think that's the smallest turn out I've had so far on this forum. I guess we're too far out from Q3 for most people planning to submit near the deadline, and too far in for the early submitters. =/

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Postby Martin L. Shoemaker » Thu May 17, 2012 12:46 pm

Strycher wrote:I think that's the smallest turn out I've had so far on this forum. I guess we're too far out from Q3 for most people planning to submit near the deadline, and too far in for the early submitters. =/


Way, way, way too far in for some of us. About 45 days, Duotrope tells me...
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Re: Story Critique

Postby Strycher » Thu May 17, 2012 12:56 pm

Martin L. Shoemaker wrote:
Strycher wrote:I think that's the smallest turn out I've had so far on this forum. I guess we're too far out from Q3 for most people planning to submit near the deadline, and too far in for the early submitters. =/


Way, way, way too far in for some of us. About 45 days, Duotrope tells me...


Yes. I know. I thought maybe some people would be prepping for Q4 or have projects for other markets I could trade for. wotf017 I might try again with the same (or a completely different) story closer to the contest deadline.

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Re: Story Critique

Postby gower21 » Thu May 17, 2012 6:11 pm

Hey Krystal, I just saw this. I'd be happy to trade. You can either crit the first chapter of my novel or the buckets of flash I keep producing to avoid finishing my Q3. I'll send you an email later tonight.

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Re: Story Critique

Postby Strycher » Fri May 18, 2012 4:12 am

gower21 wrote:Hey Krystal, I just saw this. I'd be happy to trade. You can either crit the first chapter of my novel or the buckets of flash I keep producing to avoid finishing my Q3. I'll send you an email later tonight.


I have replied to this e-mail!

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Re: Story Critique

Postby austinDm » Fri May 18, 2012 2:58 pm

I think I'll take you up on this. I've got a flash story that got a personal rejection from Flash Fiction Online but hasn't had much luck since. Be nice to get another pair of eyes on it.

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Re: Story Critique

Postby morshana » Tue May 22, 2012 9:09 am

I'm not going to be able to finish this week, Krystal.

I should be doing other stuff right now, like packing, but thought I'd catch up on the forum.

My grandfather passed away over the weekend and I will be busy with funeral-related stuff much of this week. I probably won't be getting back to my Q3 story until next week. I'll ping you when I've finished it.
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Postby Martin L. Shoemaker » Tue May 22, 2012 9:21 am

morshana wrote:I'm not going to be able to finish this week, Krystal.

I should be doing other stuff right now, like packing, but thought I'd catch up on the forum.

My grandfather passed away over the weekend and I will be busy with funeral-related stuff much of this week. I probably won't be getting back to my Q3 story until next week. I'll ping you when I've finished it.


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Re: Story Critique

Postby Strycher » Tue May 22, 2012 9:29 am

morshana wrote:I'm not going to be able to finish this week, Krystal.

I should be doing other stuff right now, like packing, but thought I'd catch up on the forum.

My grandfather passed away over the weekend and I will be busy with funeral-related stuff much of this week. I probably won't be getting back to my Q3 story until next week. I'll ping you when I've finished it.


I'm sorry for your loss. Don't worry about the crit swap. Just let me know if you need a set of eyes whenever you have time.

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Re: Story Critique

Postby morshana » Tue May 22, 2012 11:43 am

Thanks, Martin. I really appreciate it.

And thanks, Krystal.

I'm doing well. Just so much going on right now, including my grandfather's passing. It didn't come as a surprise, as he's been unwell for years now, but it's still saddening.

Off to finish my packing now. Take care everyone.
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Re: Story Critique

Postby Ember » Tue May 22, 2012 8:03 pm

Sorry to hear your news Jeanette. Please take care.

Strycher - I have a 3.5K story I can swap with you if you are still interested? How soon do you want the crit/what is the usual turn-around on these things?
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Re: Story Critique

Postby morshana » Sat Jun 02, 2012 8:08 pm

I'm ready to take your story Krystal. I have to make another quick pass through mine and then I can send it on its way.
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Re: Story Critique

Postby Strycher » Sat Jun 02, 2012 8:46 pm

morshana wrote:I'm ready to take your story Krystal. I have to make another quick pass through mine and then I can send it on its way.

wotf007 wotf007 Yeeeah. I'm making some revisions. Why don't you e-mail me when you get done and I'll try to get mine to you next week?

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Re: Story Critique

Postby morshana » Sun Jun 03, 2012 8:11 am

Strycher wrote:
morshana wrote:I'm ready to take your story Krystal. I have to make another quick pass through mine and then I can send it on its way.

wotf007 wotf007 Yeeeah. I'm making some revisions. Why don't you e-mail me when you get done and I'll try to get mine to you next week?


lol Sounds good. wotf013
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Re: Story Critique

Postby Strycher » Tue Jun 19, 2012 10:41 am

If there's anyone whose story I was supposed to critique, but haven't--speak now or forever hold your peace.

Thanks to all who helped me out with this one. I tied for second place in the Hatrack Trigger Challenge, so that was cool. wotf007

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Re: Story Critique

Postby morshana » Tue Jun 19, 2012 11:14 am

Strycher wrote:If there's anyone whose story I was supposed to critique, but haven't--speak now or forever hold your peace.

Thanks to all who helped me out with this one. I tied for second place in the Hatrack Trigger Challenge, so that was cool. wotf007


Awesome! wotf010
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Re: Story Critique

Postby Rebecca Birch » Tue Jun 19, 2012 11:15 am

It was a great story! I hope it finds a happy home. wotf008
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Re: Story Critique

Postby morshana » Tue Jun 19, 2012 11:16 am

It *was* a great story!
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Re: Story Critique

Postby Strycher » Tue Jun 19, 2012 11:18 am

morshana wrote:Awesome! wotf010


Thanks!

Rebecca Birch wrote:It was a great story! I hope it finds a happy home. wotf008


Yours too. I didn't want to say anything, because I didn't want to offend the Hatrackers, but I was really surprised that your story didn't win. After I read it I was like, "Oh crap. This one's got me beat." Let us know when you place it.

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Re: Story Critique

Postby Rebecca Birch » Tue Jun 19, 2012 2:38 pm

Strycher wrote:
Rebecca Birch wrote:It was a great story! I hope it finds a happy home. wotf008


Yours too. I didn't want to say anything, because I didn't want to offend the Hatrackers, but I was really surprised that your story didn't win. After I read it I was like, "Oh crap. This one's got me beat." Let us know when you place it.


Thanks, Krystal. I'm glad you liked it! It has made its way out into the ether, so the merry-go-round has begun. wotf008
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Re: Story Critique

Postby gower21 » Tue Jun 19, 2012 3:24 pm

Strycher wrote:
Thanks to all who helped me out with this one. I tied for second place in the Hatrack Trigger Challenge, so that was cool. wotf007


Congrats Krystal!! I loved that story!

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Re: Story Critique

Postby george nik. » Wed Jun 20, 2012 12:29 am

Congratulations, Krystal!
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Re: Story Critique

Postby Strycher » Wed Jun 20, 2012 4:42 am

Thanks guys! I've completely given up on keeping up with Critters. I get better critiques on this forum. Faster too.


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