Story Critique

[Strycher]

I've got a less than 3K first draft I'd like to critique swap. This story is something different for me, and I'm not sure it works at all. I need someone who doesn't mind being honest (I've got a thick pelt, so no worries).

I'll crit anything up to contest length. (Be aware that due to some real life drama this week, I may not be able to get a critique for a longer-than-flash story back to you until after the weekend.)

Last note: I'm throwing this one into the Hatrack trigger challenge. If you're participating in this quarter's trigger challenge, you can't crit this story as it would damage my anonymity.

PM me, please.

Thanks!

[Dustin Adams]

Bwa ha ha, I know how many words yours is.

Don't say anything else tho as I'm totally in that contest.

D

[Strycher]

Bwa ha ha, I know how many words yours is.

Don't say anything else tho as I'm totally in that contest.

D

Your face.

[Rebecca Birch]

I have to admit, although I've heard the term Hatrack many times, I'd never really looked into it. Have done so now and have registered. If I can write fast enough, I may get something in for this as well. (Sorry, that means I can't crit this!)

[Dustin Adams]

What's funny is for last year's contest I came in... 4th place.

I'm sending that story to On The Premesis for their #17 - humor

I doubt I'll come in 4th over there tho.

D

[morshana]

I'm interested in a swap, Krystal. Hope to have my story done after the weekend.

[Strycher]

I'm interested in a swap, Krystal. Hope to have my story done after the weekend.

Okee, e-mail me whenever you're ready.

[Strycher]

Really? Only three people have stories they'd like critiqued?

Again, I'm offering to critique a story of up to 17,000 words in exchange for a critique of a story that's less than 3,000 words. I get good feedback from people--typically my critiques are helpful.

I think that's the smallest turn out I've had so far on this forum. I guess we're too far out from Q3 for most people planning to submit near the deadline, and too far in for the early submitters. =/

[Martin L. Shoemaker]

I think that's the smallest turn out I've had so far on this forum. I guess we're too far out from Q3 for most people planning to submit near the deadline, and too far in for the early submitters. =/

Way, way, way too far in for some of us. About 45 days, Duotrope tells me...

[Strycher]

I think that's the smallest turn out I've had so far on this forum. I guess we're too far out from Q3 for most people planning to submit near the deadline, and too far in for the early submitters. =/

Way, way, way too far in for some of us. About 45 days, Duotrope tells me...

Yes. I know. I thought maybe some people would be prepping for Q4 or have projects for other markets I could trade for. I might try again with the same (or a completely different) story closer to the contest deadline.

[gower21]

Hey Krystal, I just saw this. I'd be happy to trade. You can either crit the first chapter of my novel or the buckets of flash I keep producing to avoid finishing my Q3. I'll send you an email later tonight.

[Strycher]

Hey Krystal, I just saw this. I'd be happy to trade. You can either crit the first chapter of my novel or the buckets of flash I keep producing to avoid finishing my Q3. I'll send you an email later tonight.

I have replied to this e-mail!

[austinDm]

I think I'll take you up on this. I've got a flash story that got a personal rejection from Flash Fiction Online but hasn't had much luck since. Be nice to get another pair of eyes on it.

[morshana]

I'm not going to be able to finish this week, Krystal.

I should be doing other stuff right now, like packing, but thought I'd catch up on the forum.

My grandfather passed away over the weekend and I will be busy with funeral-related stuff much of this week. I probably won't be getting back to my Q3 story until next week. I'll ping you when I've finished it.

[Martin L. Shoemaker]

I'm not going to be able to finish this week, Krystal.

I should be doing other stuff right now, like packing, but thought I'd catch up on the forum.

My grandfather passed away over the weekend and I will be busy with funeral-related stuff much of this week. I probably won't be getting back to my Q3 story until next week. I'll ping you when I've finished it.

I'm so sorry, Jeanette. Go take care of family. Hug them. We'll be here when you need us.

[Strycher]

I'm not going to be able to finish this week, Krystal.

I should be doing other stuff right now, like packing, but thought I'd catch up on the forum.

My grandfather passed away over the weekend and I will be busy with funeral-related stuff much of this week. I probably won't be getting back to my Q3 story until next week. I'll ping you when I've finished it.

I'm sorry for your loss. Don't worry about the crit swap. Just let me know if you need a set of eyes whenever you have time.

[morshana]

Thanks, Martin. I really appreciate it.

And thanks, Krystal.

I'm doing well. Just so much going on right now, including my grandfather's passing. It didn't come as a surprise, as he's been unwell for years now, but it's still saddening.

Off to finish my packing now. Take care everyone.

[Ember]

Sorry to hear your news Jeanette. Please take care.

Strycher - I have a 3.5K story I can swap with you if you are still interested? How soon do you want the crit/what is the usual turn-around on these things?

[morshana]

I'm ready to take your story Krystal. I have to make another quick pass through mine and then I can send it on its way.

[Strycher]

I'm ready to take your story Krystal. I have to make another quick pass through mine and then I can send it on its way.

Yeeeah. I'm making some revisions. Why don't you e-mail me when you get done and I'll try to get mine to you next week?

[morshana]

I'm ready to take your story Krystal. I have to make another quick pass through mine and then I can send it on its way.

Yeeeah. I'm making some revisions. Why don't you e-mail me when you get done and I'll try to get mine to you next week?

lol Sounds good.

[Strycher]

If there's anyone whose story I was supposed to critique, but haven't--speak now or forever hold your peace.

Thanks to all who helped me out with this one. I tied for second place in the Hatrack Trigger Challenge, so that was cool.

[morshana]

If there's anyone whose story I was supposed to critique, but haven't--speak now or forever hold your peace.

Thanks to all who helped me out with this one. I tied for second place in the Hatrack Trigger Challenge, so that was cool.

Awesome!

[Rebecca Birch]

It was a great story! I hope it finds a happy home.

[morshana]

It *was* a great story!

[Strycher]

Awesome!

Thanks!

It was a great story! I hope it finds a happy home.

Yours too. I didn't want to say anything, because I didn't want to offend the Hatrackers, but I was really surprised that your story didn't win. After I read it I was like, "Oh crap. This one's got me beat." Let us know when you place it.

[Rebecca Birch]

It was a great story! I hope it finds a happy home.

Yours too. I didn't want to say anything, because I didn't want to offend the Hatrackers, but I was really surprised that your story didn't win. After I read it I was like, "Oh crap. This one's got me beat." Let us know when you place it.

Thanks, Krystal. I'm glad you liked it! It has made its way out into the ether, so the merry-go-round has begun.

[gower21]

Thanks to all who helped me out with this one. I tied for second place in the Hatrack Trigger Challenge, so that was cool.

Congrats Krystal!! I loved that story!

[george nik.]

Congratulations, Krystal!

[Strycher]

Thanks guys! I've completely given up on keeping up with Critters. I get better critiques on this forum. Faster too.