Short Critique

[austinDm]

I'm looking for a few fresh pairs of eyes to look over a short-short before I send it out. The current draft is 1,100 words. (I know, it's an awkward length, so any advice on cutting it down to legit flash length would be appreciated.) I'll critique any length in return, but probably won't be able to return a longer story until mid-way through next month.