Anyone up for a very quick crit for a story 11,000 to 15,000 words?
Mostly looking for bad commas and other nitpicks. Obviously since it's by me so the writing isn't prefect or close to prefect, but I don't have time for a complete revising so I will take my chances with it as is. Unless some sentence doesn't make sense that is.
I can of course do one back, even though not sure about grammar and such.