Feedback on a 900 word prologue

[Henckel]

Hi there. Does anyone have time to look over 900 words for me? It’s the prologue to a novel, so not for WOTF. In short, I’m looking to get your impressions. Is the prologue compelling enough for a person to keep reading? Is the pacing feel alright? Do the prose flow alright? So, nothing too intense.
If you’re interested, please PM or email me.

…and I’m happy to return the favor.

[Henckel]

Thanks for the PMs. I'll send now.

[Harion]

Just send it over PM. I'll read it in a jiffy.