Does this opening work?

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Does this opening work?

Postby RusticBohemian » Thu Apr 16, 2020 9:00 am

I've got a pretty solid novelette that I'm finishing up, but I'm not sure about the opening.

I'd like feedback about whether or not it starts too slow and/or if it strays into, "as you know, bob," territory.

Would anyone be willing to read the first 2,000 words and let me know if they enjoy it? Please respond here or PM me and I'll send you a link to the document in Google Docs.


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Re: Does this opening work?

Postby RSchibler » Thu Apr 16, 2020 12:01 pm

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