Alpha pass on long story and crit on shorter one

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czing
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Alpha pass on long story and crit on shorter one

Postby czing » Mon Aug 03, 2020 5:53 am

Hey all,

I've got a just about 12K story (sci-fi mildly dystopian I guess) that I'd love a high level read through by someone. I've had one reader on it already and made some pretty significant changes at that point. But I still feel like I could use a "does this work" kind of read. I wouldn't want anyone to spend the time on a full out critique on it yet. I have this thing where the more I feel like the story is one of my better ones the more doubtful I am that it works at all for anyone but me. (Hooray for writerly self doubt).

I also have a 2300 word story that I wouldn't mind a more detailed critique on (kind of horror-ish which isn't a genre I've tried before).

In both of these cases I'm happy to return the favour. Just so you know before you offer my critique style is focused first on my reader reactions. I love telling people the parts I loved or laughed at - I like letting them know when it makes me think of something in my life. I will also tell you when I feel you have made a "promise" and that I'll expect something related to come up somewhere in the story. I try to keep my wording commentary semi-minimal since it's your voice not mine (although I will make recommendations where I think reordering wording would add power). And I pretty much won't ever make a comment on punctuation because mine (especially commas) is not great.

My preference would be to exchange 2 or maybe 3 on each. And if you get me your story this week I can probably turn it around really quickly!

If you think you'd be interested drop me a dm and we can make arrangements to swap.
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Re: Alpha pass on long story and crit on shorter one

Postby RSchibler » Mon Aug 03, 2020 8:50 am

I’m always available
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Re: Alpha pass on long story and crit on shorter one

Postby czing » Mon Aug 03, 2020 9:18 am

Thanks I've sent you a PM.
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Re: Alpha pass on long story and crit on shorter one

Postby Dustin Adams » Mon Aug 03, 2020 12:20 pm

I'm reading some stories now, getting caught up.

2300 is right up my alley.
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Re: Alpha pass on long story and crit on shorter one

Postby czing » Mon Aug 03, 2020 3:29 pm

Thanks, sent you a PM.
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Re: Alpha pass on long story and crit on shorter one

Postby SCAFontaine » Tue Aug 04, 2020 10:50 am

I'm available and willing if you are still looking for crits. :)
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Re: Alpha pass on long story and crit on shorter one

Postby czing » Tue Aug 04, 2020 12:57 pm

Thanks. I've sent a PM.

I truly appreciate all of you who have reached out offer. I'm certainly looking forward to returning the favor when your pieces are ready!

Now that I have two folks for each of the stories I'm likely okay for right now (I don't want to over promise on return crits and I also generally need to keep incoming crit counts manageable - too many sort of does my head in).

But as soon as these are all wrapped up I am going to be looking for chances to offer when others seek crit on this forum :)
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Re: Alpha pass on long story and crit on shorter one

Postby czing » Tue Sep 08, 2020 1:33 pm

Just want to say thanks publicly to the folks who gave me crits (especially RSchibler for getting through that 12K one with suggestions that I think helped me really take it to the next level). I truly appreciate it!
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