First Four-Fifty Critique Exchanges
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I'm more than willing to participate since my thesis is kind of winding down.
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I'm interested...after Thanksgiving. Is that too late? Or is this good through all of December?
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morshana wrote:I'm interested...after Thanksgiving. Is that too late? Or is this good through all of December?
That's not too late. I'd say "most" of December, since people are going to want to have a little time to consider comments before the deadline. Last quarter, this idea popped up pretty close to the deadline (a couple weeks, if I recall correctly, and no, I'm not going to go look at the OP to find out), and I don't recall anyone complaining about time constraints. Of course, this quarter has all the holiday chaos.
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Jess wrote:morshana wrote:I'm interested...after Thanksgiving. Is that too late? Or is this good through all of December?
That's not too late. I'd say "most" of December, since people are going to want to have a little time to consider comments before the deadline. Last quarter, this idea popped up pretty close to the deadline (a couple weeks, if I recall correctly, and no, I'm not going to go look at the OP to find out), and I don't recall anyone complaining about time constraints. Of course, this quarter has all the holiday chaos.
I am too late to join this exchange?
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Anyone interested in a first 450 exchange for Q2?
I've got my story mostly done, but I'm struggling with the opening, and I'd love to get some feedback on it.
I've got my story mostly done, but I'm struggling with the opening, and I'd love to get some feedback on it.
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You may send to me.
I think you have my email already.
I think you have my email already.
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Me too, please! I gotta whole story sitting here, but the begining limps like a two legged elephant! PM or email! :D
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A two legged elephant doesn't limp. It drags.
What do you call a fly with no wings?
A walk.

What do you call a fly with no wings?
A walk.
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Dustin Adams wrote:A two legged elephant doesn't limp. It drags.
Depends on which legs it's missing. I can also imagine an alternating hop-hop movement...
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kyle wrote:Dustin Adams wrote:A two legged elephant doesn't limp. It drags.
Depends on which legs it's missing. I can also imagine an alternating hop-hop movement...
It might also just fall over. (Elephants being pretty dang heavy--so heavy, in fact,they essentially evolved an extra toe at the back of their feet.)
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I guess I'll throw my hat in the ring again for my Q2 front-runner. The thing's just gathering dust (or the digital equivalent thereof) while I wait on my RL readers' feedback, so I may as well toss it out to a couple of people I don't know, right?
Anyway, give me a holler if you want to swap 450. Thanks in advance.
Anyway, give me a holler if you want to swap 450. Thanks in advance.
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I've updated, changed, and transmogrified my 450.
Looking for volunteers/exchangers, previous and or new.
Looking for volunteers/exchangers, previous and or new.
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I'll be happy to have another look. :)
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Hello all,
As we approach the deadline for Q2, I wanted to see if there is still anyone looking to exchange a first 450 with me. If so, let me know.
As we approach the deadline for Q2, I wanted to see if there is still anyone looking to exchange a first 450 with me. If so, let me know.
Patrick S. McGinnity
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Q2 2012 - HM
Look for "The Dubious Apotheosis of Baskin Gough" in the ARCANE II Anthology.
Mt. Pleasant/Beaver Island, Michigan
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Q2 2012 - HM
Look for "The Dubious Apotheosis of Baskin Gough" in the ARCANE II Anthology.
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Patrick S. McGinnity wrote:As we approach the deadline for Q2
We're not approaching the deadline yet! We're not even half way through the quarter! Don't scare me like that!
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I'm available for exchanges if anyone wants to trade.
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Strycher wrote: We're not approaching the deadline yet! We're not even half way through the quarter! Don't scare me like that!
Sorry, I didn't intend to, I just needed a slick way to start the sentence, sort of a lead in. Also I work slowly enough that if I'm not in final edits a month and a half out, I might not make it, so it always feels to me like time is short.
Patrick S. McGinnity
Mt. Pleasant/Beaver Island, Michigan
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Q2 2012 - HM
Look for "The Dubious Apotheosis of Baskin Gough" in the ARCANE II Anthology.
Mt. Pleasant/Beaver Island, Michigan
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Look for "The Dubious Apotheosis of Baskin Gough" in the ARCANE II Anthology.
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Patrick S. McGinnity wrote:Also I work slowly enough that if I'm not in final edits a month and a half out, I might not make it, so it always feels to me like time is short.
Me too. ::meep::
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Q2 story finished and read and re-edited after several 1st reader reviews, BUT my #1 fan doesn't like it :(
I'm hoping that it's because she's not into the science fiction genre and the story, at 9K, was possibly too long (for her).
I would be thrilled to get 3 first 450 word exchanges so that I can form a consensus.
PM or email me your details - send 450ish of your work at the same time if you email if you'd like.
Thanks
David
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I'm hoping that it's because she's not into the science fiction genre and the story, at 9K, was possibly too long (for her).
I would be thrilled to get 3 first 450 word exchanges so that I can form a consensus.
PM or email me your details - send 450ish of your work at the same time if you email if you'd like.
Thanks
David
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I have about half of my Q2 entry done now, and am ready to start sending out my first 450. If I've already done yours, I'll be in touch.
(If not, feel free to drop me a line! I'm kind of concerned about this one even making sense, let alone being any good.)

(If not, feel free to drop me a line! I'm kind of concerned about this one even making sense, let alone being any good.)
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My contest history: Semi-finalist, R, HM, R, R, HM, HM, R, R, R, R, HM, R, R, R, R, Winner
My published fiction, poetry, &c.
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My published fiction, poetry, &c.
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Woo, go late-in-the-game crits! Totally open to swapping 450s for Q2 if someone's still up for it.
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Yeeeah . . . I've gotten some mixed feedback on my opening. If anyone is still swapping 450s, I'd be obliged. PM me?
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s_c_baker wrote:I have about half of my Q2 entry done now, and am ready to start sending out my first 450. If I've already done yours, I'll be in touch.![]()
(If not, feel free to drop me a line! I'm kind of concerned about this one even making sense, let alone being any good.)
Stewart, I'll be getting back to you tonight on your 450.
I've already subbed for Q2, but I'd be glad to look at 450s for folks, just PM me.
Good luck!
Patrick S. McGinnity
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Look for "The Dubious Apotheosis of Baskin Gough" in the ARCANE II Anthology.
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Tossing my hat in the ring for last minute First 450 exchanging!
If anybody's got a few moments and a first 450 they'd also like looked at, toss me a PM or an email.
Thanks!
If anybody's got a few moments and a first 450 they'd also like looked at, toss me a PM or an email.
Thanks!
Rebecca Birch
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Words of Birch
Short Story Collection--Life Out of Harmony and Other Tales of Wonder
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I'll toss my hat in the ring too. send me a PM.
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I owe a couple of you crits. You know who you are. I may be a day or two late (that is, tomorrow or the next day). I'm so, so sorry... A 20-page paper deadline looming, several other smaller papers, exams, and a documentary/group presentation project have me losing my mind and walking in circles.
Hope you understand. I'm in no place to give a thoughtful critique right now, but I'll try and get you one as soon as possible. Again, so sorry.

Hope you understand. I'm in no place to give a thoughtful critique right now, but I'll try and get you one as soon as possible. Again, so sorry.

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Alex Kane wrote:I owe a couple of you crits. You know who you are. I may be a day or two late (that is, tomorrow or the next day). I'm so, so sorry... A 20-page paper deadline looming, several other smaller papers, exams, and a documentary/group presentation project have me losing my mind and walking in circles.
Hope you understand. I'm in no place to give a thoughtful critique right now, but I'll try and get you one as soon as possible. Again, so sorry.
Alex, I still owe you one, too, which should be forthcoming tonight.
Patrick S. McGinnity
Mt. Pleasant/Beaver Island, Michigan
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Q2 2012 - HM
Look for "The Dubious Apotheosis of Baskin Gough" in the ARCANE II Anthology.
Mt. Pleasant/Beaver Island, Michigan
R x 3
Q2 2012 - HM
Look for "The Dubious Apotheosis of Baskin Gough" in the ARCANE II Anthology.
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I'm up for another round if anyone has a 450 ready for exchange.
I'm trying something new this time. Need to know if I'm on the right track...
I'm trying something new this time. Need to know if I'm on the right track...
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I'm up for a 450 word exchange. I might have another contender later in the quarter (when I get it written), but I'm wondering how this story works. =)
Jeanette Gonzalez
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