First 1,000 words exchange?

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First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby LDWriter2 » Thu Jan 19, 2017 9:45 pm

I don't normally do this but the opening of the story I am doing is still giving me fits.

I think I have it pretty much okay but a couple of crits would help to know if I do.


I think I may have the rest of the story down. Or at least as much as I can. But it isn't giving me fits.


So anyone want to exchange first one thousands words?

It's two genre mashed together. Something different for me and not so original but I think I gave it a good twist or two. We shall see.
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Re: First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby J'nae Rae » Fri Jan 20, 2017 11:33 am

I'm having a bit of trouble with my start as well. You can send to my email, autumn.fox@cox.net

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Re: First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby Ishmael » Sat Jan 21, 2017 8:47 am

I'll be happy to take a look if you want Louis, though my WIP is progressing at a snail's pace.
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Re: First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby LDWriter2 » Sat Jan 21, 2017 8:46 pm

Ishmael wrote:I'll be happy to take a look if you want Louis, though my WIP is progressing at a snail's pace.



So is mine. Which is why it wasn't all the way done a week ago.

But most of that is my fault.

No not all, there is this problem with the opening wotf007
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Re: First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby LDWriter2 » Sat Jan 21, 2017 8:46 pm

J'nae Rae wrote:I'm having a bit of trouble with my start as well. You can send to my email, autumn.fox@cox.net

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Thanks. Monday then-maybe tomorrow.
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Re: First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby LDWriter2 » Sat Jan 21, 2017 8:48 pm

Ishmael wrote:I'll be happy to take a look if you want Louis, though my WIP is progressing at a snail's pace.




Monday or tomorrow. Uh, that is maybe Sunday. Not sure what time it is right now across the pond. wotf011
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Re: First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby LDWriter2 » Sun Jan 22, 2017 6:06 pm

Ishmael wrote:I'll be happy to take a look if you want Louis, though my WIP is progressing at a snail's pace.



I forgot to ask. Do I send it over the Forum's messager or through your E-mail?
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Re: First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby Ishmael » Sun Jan 29, 2017 3:24 am

Sorry Louis, I forgot to check back here. Please just email it.
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Re: First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby Ishmael » Mon Feb 13, 2017 8:09 am

I now have 1700 words of a supernatural horror / medieval heroic fantasy on which I should appreciate the advice of anyone who is more familiar with the genre than I am. As many of you will know I seldom stray far from hard fantasy and this one has more than a few surreal elements already.

As usual I'm happy to exchange. Please PM me if you're interested. wotf008
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Re: First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby LDWriter2 » Mon Feb 13, 2017 9:59 pm

I am not much into any type of horror even though I have read a couple of such stories. But I do know some about Heroic Medieval Fantasy
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Re: First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby Ishmael » Tue Feb 14, 2017 9:15 am

No pressure, Louis. If you feel like taking a look, I'm happy to send over the start, but don't feel under any obligation.

I'm writing very fast (by my standards). Now 3,000 words, maybe half-done, and in my inexperience of the genre I feel it might be good. The problem is it might not be as good as I think.

It started out as a candidate for one of the current Flame Tree calls, but I'm beginning to feel it might turn out better than the story I've been holding back for this quarter, as well as too long for Flame Tree.
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Re: First 1,000 words exchange?

Postby LDWriter2 » Sun Feb 19, 2017 8:57 pm

Ishmael wrote:No pressure, Louis. If you feel like taking a look, I'm happy to send over the start, but don't feel under any obligation.

I'm writing very fast (by my standards). Now 3,000 words, maybe half-done, and in my inexperience of the genre I feel it might be good. The problem is it might not be as good as I think.

It started out as a candidate for one of the current Flame Tree calls, but I'm beginning to feel it might turn out better than the story I've been holding back for this quarter, as well as too long for Flame Tree.



Something you said on another post makes me think I could take a look. At least at the first thousand or so words.
Working on turning Lead into Gold.

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The latest was Q1'12
HM-quarter 4 Volume 32
One HM for another contest
published in Strange New Worlds Ten.
Another HM http://onthepremises.com/minis/mini_18.html


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