Critiquing my story as a first time submission

[MichaelH]

Hello everyone
This is my first time posting here. I’m trying to submit my first story to the contest and would like a critique. It’s my first short story and only on its second draft. I’m ignorant as to how things work around here so help would be appreciated.

[RSchibler]

You can pm me a google docs link to your story when you’re ready and I’ll critique it.

[vibrantbear]

Michael,
I'm new too and RSchibler recently gave me a critique that was incredibly thorough and helpful. So If you have not already, I would start there. If after that you want another set of eyes on the story, let me know.