Story Critique

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ohiostate_11
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Story Critique

Postby ohiostate_11 » Mon Jun 25, 2012 11:14 am

This happens to be my first post (but certainly not the last) on this board and but it also happens that this one is very important to me. I've been working on this story for quite some time now, revising and editing and re-writing as I went. It's a Military SF story and I'm looking for some feedback, so I took an excerpt out where I feel the story really picks up. I'm finally home for summer break but have found myself bored beyond measure. I will literally read any story, lengthy or not, just give me something to do!

Be as honest or blunt with your critique of the story as you deem necessary, I take criticism very well.

PM me, please!

Thanks!
"Words are your mark upon the world. Bend your condition to your will and keep going."

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Re: Story Critique

Postby Dustin Adams » Mon Jun 25, 2012 11:35 am

Welcome Mr. Ohiostate.

How long is your tale?

Sometimes that can help a person determine if they have the time to crit/swap.

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Eight EDF stories. DSF: Short Story. My Semi-F My Finalist #1

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Re: Story Critique

Postby ohiostate_11 » Mon Jun 25, 2012 11:50 am

2,013 words! So a pretty quick read. Thanks Dustin, I'll definitely post a word count next time!
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Re: Story Critique

Postby Lee » Tue Jul 03, 2012 6:05 am

Ohio, I'm down to swap. I'm not very strong at grammar or at age old rules and formatting procedures. But I have a good feel for the significance and quality that information provides. I have up to 43,000 but can be split up into smaller comparable size.

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Re: Story Critique

Postby josephk » Thu Jul 12, 2012 11:33 am

I'd love to have a look at it, too. email it to me.
Q4/31: Submitted 9/30 e-sub. HM 12/9/14 by email.
Q3/30: Submitted 6/30 e-sub. rejected...meh, sometime.
Q4/29: Submitted 9/28 e-sub. Rejected 12/11/12 email.
Q3/29: Submitted 6/30 e-sub. withdrawn 7/10.
Q2/29: Submitted 1/16 e-sub. Rejected 7/9 email.


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